Where Do They Go, Part 1
ISBN numbers for hard copy only), Tellwell Talent, a children’s book in e-form by Barry Donaldson.
This is a very short introductory book in which Mrs. Williams once again discovers one lone sock among the pairs in her washing machine. She charges her small son and daughter to not lose any more socks. The tale ensues with their activity in attempting to comply. As children’s books go, it appears to be a most satisfactory beginning. It is appropriately and well-written and the pictures should bring the children into the story. The only question arising for this reviewer, is if there is enough of the tale in this first part of the story as presented. Readers’ reaction obviously will determine the answer and certainly can be far better judged by those who have small children available with which to share.
3* Well-written but acceptance depending upon brevity.
Battling Isis – The Road to Mosul, is a thriller with considerable erotica in an e-book by Ernie Marier.
Plot: Michael Roundtree is a Half-breed American Indian whose great grandfather had established the Rogue River Trading Post. The business gradually developed into a highly successful enterprise that owned a large section of the state and had a net worth in the millions. Under Michael’s direction, success continued and his personal direction was additionally directed to survival tactics for which he established a survival school of sorts. He could survive under almost any conditions, was a master marksman, and could cover miles of ground at a steady rate of six minutes/mile. His older brother, Vince was a missionary working in a Syrian refugee camp. He was captured by Isis and beheaded. Michael witnessed the act on television. He decides to take revenge and the story evolves following his resulting journeys and activities. The action includes help from Kurdish, Egyptian and Israeli characters as well as some help from the CIA. The other characters, except for his beautiful paramour Avalina, an Israeli Army Corporal, and Willie, a Kurdish governmental agent, only incidentally participate in the story and are only slightly characterized.
Discussion: The author has an intriguing plot and has the ability to generate periods of tension throughout. Regrettably, the mood is fractured repeatedly by a number of faults. Shifts constantly occur from the first to the third person; present to past tense occurs; there is repetition of entire sections (e.g. location 638 repeats 627, again in location 938, others); words are omitted and/or repeated; there is constant repetition, with little to no change in verbalization of Michael’s activity as he proceeds to attack the enemy; similarly, the author provides pages of explicit descriptions of sexual activity only to repeat these in ensuing sections of the book. It is granted that graphically depicted sexual acts undoubtedly have a strong appeal for many readers and thus are not criticized per se. It would seem, however, that a knowledgeable editor could devise some greater variation in description of the activity, as well as for scenes of his enemy attacks. A good proof reading at the very least is necessary to ‘clean up’ some of the detritus that interferes with what could be an interesting story.
3* at best. Basically intriguing thriller/erotica plot; monumental need for editing/proof reading